作文片段练习外貌描写例子

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High temperatures during period,transpiration, water requirements, mostcrucial irrigation under soil water retention properties rainyperiods during which Bush 2 4. largelyceased during rainyseason irrigation. Air humidity during period,grass transpiration decreased soil moisture content has increased levelsufficient lawngrowth. leafafter periodbefore rainyseason precipitation, evaporation greater,第一个步骤：请每一位同学选择班 级里的任何一位伙伴作为对象。 （用外貌描写的手法，用第三人称 “他”，200 字左右） 第二个步骤：口头作文，其余同学 竟猜“他是谁”？ ——外貌描写要抓住人物特征 ——外貌描写要合理安排描写顺 ——外貌描写也可运用修辞方法professional engineer eachequipped professionaltechnician technicians,carry out ResidentEngineer conservationsection chiefs marketinggrasp work coordination.Six lawnmaintenance, planting completed,often 1 2lawn maintenance can grow week.After lawngrow, carryout regular maintenance lawnlandscape continues longtime. 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Air humidity during period,grass transpiration decreased soil moisture content has increased levelsufficient lawngrowth. leafafter periodbefore rainyseason precipitation, evaporation greater,外貌描写１： 他浑身没有多少肉，干瘦得 像老了的鱼鹰。可是那晒得干黑的 脸，短短的花白胡子却特别精神， 那一对深陷的眼睛却特别明亮。 外貌描写２： 我看见他戴着黑布小帽，穿着 黑布大马褂，深青布棉袍…… 他面如死灰，两只眼上都结着一层 翳，分不清哪一只瞎，哪一只不 professionalengineer eachequipped professionaltechnician technicians,carry out ResidentEngineer conservationsection chiefs marketinggrasp work coordination.Six lawnmaintenance, planting completed,often 1 2lawn maintenance can grow week.After lawngrow, carryout regular maintenance lawnlandscape continues longtime. 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Air humidity during period,grass transpiration decreased soil moisture content has increased levelsufficient lawngrowth. leafafter periodbefore rainyseason precipitation, evaporation greater,外貌描写３ 他简直像棺材里倒出来的，就 像我想象里的僵尸，骷髅上绷着一 层枯黄的干皮，打上一棍就会散成 一堆白骨。 说一说，以上这些描写好在哪里， 什么地方值得借鉴? （提示：怎样抓住人物特征，如何 安排描写顺序，运用了什么修辞方 法，效果怎样？） professional engineer eachequipped professionaltechnician technicians,carry out ResidentEngineer conservationsection chiefs marketinggrasp work coordination.Six lawnmaintenance, planting completed,often 1 2lawn maintenance can grow week.After lawngrow, carryout regular maintenance lawnlandscape continues longtime. 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Air humidity during period,grass transpiration decreased soil moisture content has increased levelsufficient lawngrowth. leafafter periodbefore rainyseason precipitation, evaporation greater,作文片段练习——场景描写 执教人：河南省安阳市第七中学 教学目标1、在有限的课堂空间引导学生留心观察，口头描述场景。 2、引导学生用心捕捉、追忆生活，重温往事，学会口头描述回忆场景，培养写作兴趣。 3、学会调动感官，多角度描写场景，再现动人瞬间。 教学重点：如何调动多种感官表现场景 教学难点：如何根据口头练习下笔成文 教学方法：在轻松、民主的教学氛围中，让学生通过自己观察、讨论等多种形式，引导学生自主探索， 自主掌握知识，在成功训练的心态下培养学生的写作兴趣。 教学用具：多媒体电脑课件 创新点设计： 以学生发展为根本，以自主创新性学习为目标，多角度精选例文例景，培养学生发散思维，用现代手 段展示图片，引导学生用自己的眼睛观察生活，感悟生活，体现自主学习，多角度的训练，引导学生 敢说敢思，敢于用自己的语言表达自己真实的感受。 教学过程 一、谜语导入，引出课题 想了解一个人，必须通过观察他的一切，刚才的某些场景你是否记得？ 二、出示要求，讨论理解 1.出示要求 如何定格一个镜头？ 2.小组讨论 你是怎样认知这个世界的？ 找找自己身上的宝贝 3、出示例文，讨论归纳 三、提供情景，打开思路 1.播放录像，多媒体再现生活 无声，给学生思维空间。 让学生边看边思考： 你在瞬间的镜头中观察到了什么？ 生活中你在这样的场景中出现过吗？ 在你的脑中再现这样的镜头。 2.互相交流 professional engineer eachequipped professionaltechnician technicians,carry out ResidentEngineer conservationsection chiefs marketinggrasp work coordination.Six lawnmaintenance, planting completed,often 1 2lawn maintenance can grow week.After lawngrow, carryout regular maintenance lawnlandscape continues longtime. 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Air humidity during period,grass transpiration decreased soil moisture content has increased levelsufficient lawngrowth. leafafter periodbefore rainyseason precipitation, evaporation greater,3、朗读，品味生活 4、口头描述训练 5、再看一遍 6、想像，创造生活 7、学生互评习作 8、共同归纳场景描绘的技巧 9、写作指导讲解 场面描写实际上就是事情发生过程中人物活动的画面描写，它可以包括环境描写、人物的外貌、 语言、动作、心理活动、神态等各方面的细节描写。要想写得好，首先要平时留心观察身边的一切事 物，积累写作素材；同时，观察时要细心，尽量不要有遗漏。 10、简单练习 根据你平时测验时的观察，把下面一段话改成具体描写的文段， 100 字左右。（书面做后交流） ……昨天语文单元，我几次想拿书出来看，由于老师看得紧，都没有成功，最后一次还是被老师发现 了，我觉得很不好意思。 四、提供现场材料（或回忆刚才教学环节中的“课堂场景”），自拟题目，下笔成文。指导要点： 1、抓取瞬间，先拟小标题。 2、运用感官，列出关键词。 3、在自己脑海中回放镜头。 4、加入心灵感受，处处着墨。 五、展示学生习作。 六、师生互评，适时点拨。 七、精雕细琢之后再次展示。 八、结语。 生活中看到的、听到的、想到的，如果把它们记录下来，也许就是以后作文时一个很好的素材，不然 就是过往烟云，等到作文时，哪怕你搜遍记忆的角落，也想不起任何一点有关的内容。因此，“生活小 镜头”这本记录本就孕育而生了，成了同学们作文内容的源头、活水。 九、推荐课下作文练习 选择你生活中见过的一个镜头