网上作文批改

网上作文批改 阅读：2009 11 02 17:17 标签： Luck and Lily习作原文Luck and lily are good friends. Luck is thirteen years old, inclass 4, grade 7, lily is fourteen years old. In Class 8, Grade 8.they often go to school. Come back home, play games and drawpictures toegther. They hke reaking books, going to library anddoing their homework on Sunday. They look the same, but they aren’ttwins. It’s a surpise.批 改 老 师评 分96分级 别优秀批 改（1） Luck and lily are good friends. Luck is thirteen years old, inclass（Class） 4, grade（Grade） 7, （2）lily is fourteen yearsold.（句号改为逗号） In（in不大写） Class 8, Grade 8. （3）they often go toschool. （4）Come back home, play games and draw pictures toegther.（5）They hke （like）reaking books, going to （the）library and doingtheir homework on Sunday. They look the same, but they aren’ttwins. （6）It’s a surpise.1Luck and lily are good friends. lily改为Lily. （2）lil 我的更多文章