中立的写作角度 能让考官对你雅思大作文印象深刻
这道题的开头,有位同学曾这么写:
More and more children are suffering from overweight, which is not a positive situation for children’s growth.??In this essay, I will discuss??some reasons and effects of children’s overweight.
请注意我在开头中,标注的蓝色部分。
不少同学会很自然的用这样的表达方式,完成对观点的阐述。
这句话错吗?没错。
可够中立吗?不够。
如果要变得更加中立,那么这句话可以这么写:
This essay will discuss some reasons and effects of children s overweight.
你读一下这两句,感受其中微妙的差别。能体会出来吗?
中立的第一步,就是把“I”去掉。
许多老师或者同学,都能记住在雅思作文里不能用“I”,
可并不知道为什么要这么做。
文章里一旦出现了我,那难免会有偏见,
我认为如何如何“,自然就预示自己可能忽略了别人的看法。
如果想更中立一些,可以把这句话改为:
In this essay, it will be argued that children s overweight has different causes and effects.
你再对比下,三句话之间的细微差别,从中体会什么叫做中立。
1. In this essay, I will discuss some reasons and effects of children s overweight.
2. This essay will discuss some reasons and effects of children s overweight.
3. It will be argued that children s overweight has different causes and effects.
试着运用第三方的口吻,表达自己内心的观点,
是做好中立态度的第一步。