2019高考冲刺——官方眼里的满分英语作文原来如此啊！附不同档次的考场作文原貌图
之有理，用再好的模板句都是无济于事，反而东施效颦。
2.一定要严格审题，搞懂题目的要求，完成任务才是最要紧的。
五档作文
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Considering the abundant information of good, many people now base their purchases on the ratings. Some consumers sing praise for the ratings while others find it disappointing.
From my perspective, ratings for consumption generally benefit customers andare,括弧处是我更正原文错误处thus worth applauding.Reasons are as follows: To begin with, ratingsfree people from unnecessary time and efforts spent in sorting through the variety of information online.In addition, in spite of the occasions when dissatisfaction occurs, ratings are based on a good number of remarks, which means high ratings largely lead to good service. Therefore, choices made according to ratings make sense. Last but not least, the businessmen will not turn a blind eye tothe rankings consequently, quality of goods and services may be increased through competitions through which companies aim to rank higher.
Critically perceived and wisely used, ratings for consumption will necessarily contribute to better consuming experiences.
官方评价:
我的看法：
这篇作文读起来非常流畅，地道，除了逻辑缜密外，主要体现在：1.连贯 2.词块。几乎每个句子都是用常用的词块写成的。更难能可贵的是，每个名词的修饰形容词都是恰当的。下面的低档作文就这个差了，切记：英语的每个词都不能拉郎配，汉语意思好像说得通，但英语却少见的现象非常普遍的。
譬如本篇作文：
1.benefit这个词，直接用sth benefit sb其实就是非常简洁的，但很多学生非要整一个很别扭的词块。
2. be worth applauding对applaud的准确使用
3….free people from unnecessary time and efforts spent in sorting through the variety of information online.
这个句子充分体现了作者驾驭长难句的能力：free sb from…使人摆脱；spent in doing …后置定语.
这个句子其实就是一个简单句，不过用到一个很长的后置定语，但看起来一点不累，因为用到了常见的词块串起来了。
其它的还有：
4. in spite of the occasions when…
5. make sense
6. turn a blind eye to
7. Critically perceived and wisely used
8. contribute to
这样的作文不是轻易能写就的，而是平时长期通过大量的刻意练习达到的，即：写作一定要考虑——逻辑通顺、词块运用、修饰语的贴切、造句的构思。这样练久了，考场上才能挥洒自如。
四档作文
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According the material we can know that Li Jiang’s family gains a satisfied trip according to the ratings, but Su Hua’s mother isn’t content with restaurants which is on a rating.
From my angle, I am in favor the ratings. There are many reasons for my opinion. To begin with, the ratings reflect most people’s interests and I believe the ratings have common representation. To some extend, it is reliable. What is more, the ratings can provide a guidance to people who are not familar with the service. So the customers can have knowledge of this service. Last but not least, the ratings should give a right direction to customers and reduce the chances of cheating and it is safe for customers’ possession. Though sometimes ratings may can’t satisfy some customers because different people have different interests and their economic conditions are also varies, ratings can represent the mass. So customers can take ratings as a reference.
In a word, the ratings are beneficial to our choice and only when we use it correctly can we benefit from it most and choose the most suitable choice.
官方评价：
我的评价：
这篇作文逻辑上也没有问题，但最大的问题就是汉式英语思维重。作文就是这点让人无奈，你一旦自己创造词块，100%是错误的。
下面我来分析一下：
1.作者想到汉语“有普遍的代表性“，遇是写了：have common representation。你要问问自己：英语中有这个说法吗？你自己平时都没见过，你怎么敢考场上写出来呢？
2.作者要表达：知道，却用了have knowledge of，本来一个know就可以了，但为了用高级，用了一个错误的词块。任何时候：对高于一切。
3. reduce the chances of cheating，这个是为了表达“减少受骗的可能“，英语最关心逻辑，cheating是主动，这里表达的是受骗，所以是being cheated。由于汉语对主被动非常随意，这和英语恰好相反。一个动词拿出来，首先考虑的就是主动还是被动。
4.it is safe for customers’ possession这句一般人都看不懂的，但由于我长期和学生的错误打交道，我还是能秒懂的，他要表达是顾客的财产安全有保证。可惜这样直译出来，谁能看懂呢？
5.这个may can’t satisfy some customers就是大错了。
6.ratings can represent the mass这也是典型的汉式思维。汉语说：这个排名代表了大众，好像没问题，但是英语是讲逻辑的，排名是个没有生命的东西，大众是人，怎么让一个物代表人，难道搞拟人修辞？其实应该说排名反映了大众的看法。
三档作文
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What can be reflected from the passage is that Liang enjoyed the service with the ratings while Su Hua was puzzled about it. When it comes to the ratings, I have profound comprehension of it. I think it’s bad for us. The reasons accounting for it can be listed as follows. On the one hand, it often cheat people a lot of money and don’t give good service, which can make people unhappy. On the other hand, it mislead people to buy some things which they want have. It also can cause the unhealthy development of economy. Taking what has been mentioned about into account, we can come to a conclusion that the ratings is bad for us.
However, sometimes it also can benefit us. As a result, we should learn how to judge it correctly. In my view, we should be cautious about it. Only in this way can we have a enjoyable consume.
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我的看法：
依我看，这篇作文才是大部分学生的水平，表面上看他用到了很多词块，而且连贯，还有句型等等，但遗憾：不及格。
先看这个同学用的：
When it comes to the ratings
The reasons accounting for it can be listed as follows.
Taking what has been mentioned about into account, we can come to a conclusion that
However, sometimes it also can benefit us.
Only in this way can we have a enjoyable consume.
看起来很不错，就这几条已经把50%学生给秒了。他的最主要的问题是：内容空洞，逻辑不通。你看最后一段，就是一套路：我们要谨慎对待，只有这样我们才怎样怎样。就不能具体化一点吗？如何谨慎要说说。然后就是语言错误多，特别是三单形式错误普遍。这个真要命的。
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