高中英语作文复习公开课课件

. 1. 知道英语建议信的问题特征，掌握其写作技巧。 2. 能用书信形式对某一问题提出建议并给出理由，得体地表达自己的观点。 3. 掌握英语建议信的写作步骤和常用表达方式，进行有效写作。 Learning goals （学习目标） Lead in （课堂导入） Writing task （任务展示） 假定你是李华，你的美国朋友 Peter 近期打算 来长治旅游，请你给他写一封 建议信 ，并祝他旅行 愉快。 内容要点： . 1. 先参观一些感兴趣的地方； 2. 多搜集一些关于这些地方的信息； 3. 多与当地人谈话，以了解长治的历史和文化。 注意： . 1. 文章 100 词左右，开头和结尾已给出，不入 总词数。 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 1. 审题 2. 列提纲/ 要点 3. 连词成句 4. 连句成篇 5. 润色修正 6. 定稿 体裁 时态 结构 要求 字数 内容 我的 建议 开头 正文 结尾 体裁 人称 时态 要求 结构 字数 内容 一般现在时 Para.1 Para.2 Para.3 抓要点, 100 个左右 已给出 已给出 Id like to make some suggestions to you for your coming visit to Changzhi. 先参观你感兴趣的著名景点， 例如 ......, 这些地方每年吸引了 数以万计的游客。 Wish you in advance a pleasant trip to Changzhi. 书信格式 租给体育公司，创造经济效益 开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客 第一, 三人称 ① ①08 年奥运会刚刚落幕. ② 征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议. ③ 你想写一些建议 开头信息1 ① 08 年奥运会刚刚落幕. . ② 征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议. . ③ 你想写一些建议. . . Want to write some advice/Would like to give you some advice Contribute some suggestions to you. Collect some advice How to use/make use of /make the best of the stadiums. After the Olympic Games After Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games . The 2008 Beijing Olympic/ were over/finished/held successfully in Beijing. ① 向公众开放，用于健身. ②租给体育公司，创造经济效益. ③ 开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客 . Use it as/be used for/as; take it as; open it for Places of interest/tourist attractions Attract tourists/appeal to visitors/ be attraction for visitors Give to/Rent to/be rented to Sport company/companies which organize matches/organizing matches Make/ create money; bring in money/make more profits Open/be opened to the people/public/open them to public. Be used for/as; be made to; Do some exercise/build our bodies/strengthen our bodies 信息2 信息3 信息4 向公众开放，用于健身 租给体育公司，创造经济效益 开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客 正 正 文 文 . 信息5 总结，意愿 结尾 In my opinion/ as far as I am concerned../from my point of view. I would appreciate I would you will think of /take into consideration . 开头信息1 ① 08 年奥运会刚刚落幕. . ② 征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议. . ③ 你想写一些建议. . . ① ①The 2008 Beijing Olympic Games were over/finished. The 29th Olympic Games were held successfully in Beijing. Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games with a great success. ① ①The 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. Beijing achieved its dream of hosting the 29th Olympic Games successfully. ② ②Collect some advice How to use/make use of /make the best of the stadiums. After the Olympic Games After Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games . ② ②You are collecting some advice on how to make use of the stadiums after Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games . I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums after Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games successfully. ③ ③Want to write some advice/Would like to give you some advice Contribute some suggestions to you. ③ ③I would like to give you some advice. I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you 4. Use it as/be used for/as;take it as;open it for Places of interests/tourist attractions Attract tourists/appeal to visitors/ be attraction for visitors 3. Give to/Rent to/be rented to Sport company/companies which organize matches/organizing matches Make/create money; bring in money/make more profits 信息2 信息3 信息4 向公众开放，用于健身 租给体育公司，创造经济效益 开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客 正 正 文 文 2.Open/be opened to the people/public/open them to public. Be used for/as; be made to; Do some exercise/build our body/strengthen our bodies 2. The stadiums can be opened to the public. The public can build their bodies/strengthen their bodies 3.The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in more money/make more profits 4.They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors. . 信息5 总结，意愿 结尾 In my opinion/ as far as I am concerned../from my point of view. I would appreciate I would you will think of /take into consideration . In a word From my point of view, we should do what we can to make full use of the stadium. I would appreciate it if you would take my advice into deep consideration Para.1: The 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums. I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you. Para.2:The stadiums can be opened to the public. The public can build their bodies/strengthen their bodies. The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in more money/make more profits. They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors. Para.3: From my point of view, we should do what we can to make full use the stadium. I would appreciate it if you would take my advice into deep consideration Para.1: The 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums. I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you. Para.1: I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums after the 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. Here I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you. Para.2:The stadiums can be opened to the public. The public can strengthen their bodies. The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in much more profits. They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors. Para.2: First of all, the stadiums can be opened to the public.The public can strengthen their bodies. Secondly,The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in much more profits. last but not least, They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors. First of all Firstly, To begin with, In addition, Besides, Moreover, What s more Finally, What s worse, 使用恰当的连接词 逻辑角度 合适的过渡性词汇 ⑴ 排序关系 ⑵ 并列关系 ⑶ 举例关系 ⑷ 转折关系 ⑸ 因果关系 ⑹ 归纳总结 ⑺ 递进关系 first; firstly; second; secondly; last but not least and; too; as well as; along with; together with for example; for instance; like; such as; as to but; however; while; though; on the contrary because; since; thanks to; as a result /consequence of; thus; therefore in a word; in short; to sum up; in conclusion what s more; besides; to make matters worse; what s worse; worse still; furthermore I heard you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums after the 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. Here I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you. First of all, the stadiums can be opened to the public. The public can strengthen their bodies. Secondly, The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in much more profits. last but not least, They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors. From my point of view, we should do what we can to make full use the stadium. I would appreciate it very much if you would take my advice into deep consideration 二 二. 使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档 三 三. 巧用倒装增强句子表现力 四 四. 尝试多样化表达方式 式 一 一. 使用较高级词汇使文章增加吸引力 ① 强调句 ② With 短语复合结构 ③ 定语从句 ④ 名词性从句 主宾表同从句 ⑤ 各种状语从句 ⑥ 被动语态 1. Many people want to visit the stadium . 2. The stadium is useful. Many people are dying to visit the stadium. The stadium is of great value. 一 一. 使用较高级词汇使文章增加吸引力 1.The 29th Olympic Games were successfully ended. It left many stadiums unused The 29th Olympic Games were successfully ended, leaving many stadiums unused. 二 二. 使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档 1.we can let stadium make sense Only when we make full use of the stadium 2. The stadiums can be rented to the physical company to create more economic profits. they can be the places to appeal visitors to pay a visit. Only when we make full use of the stadium can we let stadium make sense. Not only can the stadiums be rented to the physical company to create more economic profits, but also they can be the places to appeal visitors to pay a visit. 三 三. 巧用倒装增强句子表现力 We should take the Olympic stadiums into consideration after Beijing hosted the games successfully. The 29th Olympic Games were ended successfully. we start talking about how to use the stadiums properly for our daily lives It is the Olympic stadiums that we should take into consideration after Beijing hosted the games successfully. With the 29th Olympic Games ended successfully, we start talking about how to use the stadiums properly for our daily lives. 四 四. 尝试多样化表达方式 ① 强调句 ② With 短语复合结构 You can open them for the public. The stadiums can be used to take exercise. You can open the stadiums which can be used to take exercise for the public. 四 四. 尝试多样化表达方式 ③ 定语从句 ④ 各种状语从句 我们锻炼的越多，我们就越健康。 The more exercises we take, the healthier we will become. ⑤ 被动语态 We should pay more attention to the stadiums . More attention should be paid to the stadiums. I heard you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums after the 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. Here I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you. First of all, the stadiums can be opened to the public. The public can strengthen their bodies. Secondly, The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in much more profits. last but not least, They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors. From my point of view, we should do what we can to make full use the stadium. I would appreciate it very much if you would take my advice into deep consideration 高考书面表达各档次的给分范围和要求 第五档（ 21 25 分） 完全完成 了试题规定的任务: : ?? 准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容，要点无遗漏 ?? 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇 ?? 语法结构和词汇有少许错误，但为尽可能使用较复杂表达方式 所致；具备较强的语言应用能力 ?? 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑 完全达到了预期的写作目的。 第四档（ 16 20 分） 完成 了试题规定的任务: : ?? 比较准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容 ?? 应用语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求 ?? 语法结构和词汇应用基本准确，少许错误主要是因为尝试较复 杂语言结构或词汇所致 ?? 应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑达到了预期的写作目的。 With the 29th Olympic Games ended successfully, What we should do now is how to make full use of the stadiums. I heard you are dying for some advice on how to make the best of them. Here I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you. First of all, the stadiums can be opened to the public, where they can strengthen their bodies conveniently. Secondly,The stadiums can be rented to sport companies which organize matches, thus bringing in much more profits. last but not least, They can be used as tourist attraction. Because many of them are so well designed with strong Chinese features that they will surely be attractions for visitors from all over the world. From my point of view, we should do what we can to make full use of the stadiums. Only when we take actions can we bring a bright future to their value. I would appreciate it very much if you would take my advice into deep consideration 学校英语社征稿，请同学们就校园清洁清洁问题 和校园环境发表看法，并提出建议， 包括如下内容： 词数：120 个左右。 注意：题目已为你写出，不计入总词数。 Better schoolyard contributes to a better school life Homework 美好环境让人感到舒适，心情愉快，从而提高效率（ efficiency ）； 就校园做清洁和保洁提两点建议； 就美化校园提两点建议。 内容 语法 思想 框架 组织结构 要点全，拓展有度，有效 连接词，作文结构紧凑； 流畅 准确，复杂语法结构，高级词汇，多种句型 开放能引起读者的共鸣, 灵魂