作文赏析——Misunderstanding Can Never Overcome Kindness

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今天你读了一篇题目为“Who Knocked down the Eggs?”的文章，读后你很有感触。请根据要求补充完整下面的日记。

写作要求：根据第一段内容，用一相关事例具体描述。

Sept. 11, 2020 Friday Cloudy

Giving help to others may cause trouble. I read a story today about a person who helped pick up the eggs knocked down by a woman, but was mistaken as the one who did it. Luckily the manager admitted his mistake and apologized.

I was sorry for the author because I had a similar experience. __________________

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Misunderstanding exists around us, but I do believe that it can never overcome kindness.

语篇解读：

显然，续写部分是记叙文，是一个完整的故事情节，而全国高考浙江卷及山东卷的续写的故事开端往往已经铺陈。

故事的主题不仅需要突出“误会”(misunderstanding)，也需要体现“善良” (kindness)，最终后者战胜前者，问题得到了解决。

续写情节架构：

1. 故事与主题要吻合；

2. 故事的开端、发展及高潮在同一段落，高潮部分应体现问题的恶化达到无以复加的程度；

3. 续写的第二段是问题的转机和解决部分。

习作1

Last summer vacation, with my parents I paid a visit to a relative who lives in the countryside of Shan’xi Province. On a sunny day, I went out among many apples trees for a walk. Suddenly I saw someone picking apples stealthily (暗地里, 悄悄地) and as I moved towards him, he ran away in panic. It occurred to me that he was a thief. And many apples scattered on the ground when he was escaping. What a waste! So I decided to help pick up these apples to return them to the owner when an old woman frightened me by shouting, “No wonder my apples are disappearing mysteriously recently. It must be you who always come to steal my apples.”

Before I understood what happened, she had already sat on the ground, shedding tears for the loss of her only finance source. I just stood there, very embarrassed by this ridiculous misunderstanding. Finally I was helped out by a farmer nearby witnessing the whole incident. Still, I gave all the money on me to the woman, telling her I would buy all the dropped apples. The old woman thanked me with tears.

故事的开头讲述“我”去年暑假到陕西农村探望亲戚，有一天，“我”在苹果树间散步，突然发现有人偷苹果。

故事的发展是：小偷一惊，苹果散落一地。“我”决定把苹果捡起来，还给主人。

故事的高潮是：这时候一位妇女大叫，“难怪我的苹果最近神秘消失啦，肯定是你偷走了我的苹果。”

该段主要涉及三个人，小偷、老妇人和“我”，从故事的开始、发展，寥寥几笔，到段末勾勒出“误会”(misunderstanding) 达到了高潮。

续写的第二段主要描述问题的转机和解决。故事由高潮逐渐退进结束，这位妇女坐在地上哭着要“我”给予经济赔偿，“我”因这样的误会而感到很尴尬。这时出现转机，幸好附近有个农夫目击了一切，最后“误会”完美收官，“我”把身上的现金给了老妇人，她含泪感谢了“我”，“我”得于脱身。

习作2

On a hot summer noon when my classmates and I were having a lunch break, two students beside us suddenly started to quarrel bitterly, merely on some spilt soup. Other students gathered around them, but the quarrel didn’t cool down at all. Instead, they began fighting fiercely, turning the desks and chairs into a dreadful mess. At this very moment, by instinct, I stood up, rushed towards them and struggled to push them apart. The conflict was about to be settled when unexpectedly, a teacher turned up, staring at me as if I were bullying the two peers.

This second I was about to explain, the next second I was taken away by him. It was not until my classmates shouted out loudly my innocence that the teacher realized his mistake. He kept saying “sorry” to me for misunderstanding me and taking “rude” action, and he thought highly of my “heroic” behavior. I was glad and excited, and a bit released, though.

故事的开头简述了一个炎热的中午，“我”和同学餐后休息。因为一点小事，旁边的两个同学吵起架来。

故事的发展是：别的同学围观过来，吵架升级至打架，把课室里的桌椅弄得一塌糊涂。这时，“我”本能地站了起来，冲到他们当中，奋力将他们分开。

故事的高潮是：本来事情就到此为止了，可是，老师突然出现，误认为“我”在欺负他们两。

续写的第二段主要描述误会出现了转机，最后得到了解决。不容“我”解释，老师把“我”带离。直到同学们说出“我”是无辜的，老师才意识到误会了“我”，他向“我”道歉，并表扬了“我”。

不少老师也许为找不到读后续写的材料而烦恼，其实高一、高二期间是写作的积累期，可以练习写作一个完整的小故事，平时多关注记叙文类的阅读理解文章，将文章改编为故事续写。高三期间，应该进入专门的高考模式的读后续写训练。总之，无论以那种形式进行读后续写，都必须按照读后续写的文章结构、情节构思及评分准则去创作，对故事的续写规则的熟悉程度应达到烂熟于心。

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